Сократите текст для пересказа. ) nowadays many people relate to sport as to an integral part of their lives. however, not all of them do sport themselves as they prefer watching it on tv. in my opinion people should do sports on a daily basis as it is utterly beneficial for their health. firstly, sportsmen are said to have good immune system as a result of their regular exercise and this enables them to stave off getting sick. what is more, for people who are complaining about being overweight due to sedentary lifestyle, sports seems to be the only way to get into shape and lose a couple of kilos. finally, when people lead an active life they do not have time to get bored and consequently sports may become an excellent tool to entertain yourself and boost your energy level. nevertheless, they opponents claim that watching sport events on tv brings enough excitement and they do not need to be involved in it personally. additionally, while doing sports one may get injured and end up in hospital. it is also true that only by doing sports we are able to strengthen our body and improve our health. all things considered, while i agree that watching sports may make an amusing pastime but regardless of this every person should do some sports as it is a prerequisite for good health.
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