We were on a camping holiday and decided to go for a long hike in the mountains. It was fantastic and I liked it so much.
First, my friends and I found a place where we set our tents. That evening we made some food and then we went to sleep. But suddenly, I heard a loud roar. Something was trying to get into our tent. And my friends and I were scared. But we remembered that we had a gun. After that, we shot the bear. He was scared and ran away.
In the morning we packed up and continued our hike in the mountain.
В первом абзаце, 2 предложение : напиши лучше не liked, а enjoyed, так красивее звучит. Во втором абзаце, первое предложение foundED (в времени глагол имеет такое окончание). Второе предложение скажи лучше we went to sleep (мы пошли спать, а ты сказал мы спали. В четвёртом предложение лучше скажи не something (что-то), а someone (кто-то), так правильнее. We shot, and the beat was scared, after that he ran away. Скажи так. Третий абзац : we took all our staff скажи так, вместо we packed. We packed звучит некрасиво. Вроде все ясно))
We were on a camping holiday and decided to go for a long hike in the mountains. It was fantastic and I liked it so much.
First, my friends and I found a place where we set our tents. That evening we made some food and then we went to sleep. But suddenly, I heard a loud roar. Something was trying to get into our tent. And my friends and I were scared. But we remembered that we had a gun. After that, we shot the bear. He was scared and ran away.
In the morning we packed up and continued our hike in the mountain.
Во втором абзаце, первое предложение foundED (в времени глагол имеет такое окончание). Второе предложение скажи лучше we went to sleep (мы пошли спать, а ты сказал мы спали. В четвёртом предложение лучше скажи не something (что-то), а someone (кто-то), так правильнее. We shot, and the beat was scared, after that he ran away. Скажи так.
Третий абзац : we took all our staff скажи так, вместо we packed. We packed звучит некрасиво.
Вроде все ясно))